Dr. Jamie Bondage

1.We did not strip down that that night, which was probably a mistake on Ethan’s part. Take out a that. 2.So, I look away and modestly and pull the blanket ...

1.I quickly put my hands down, my eyes lowering to the floor. My grandparents looked at me strangely. Combine these and put as after floor. That was creepy! Lol. But ...

1. People often call me the oddball of the school, I have only a few friends, but they’re all the friends I need. It sounds like you just threw these ...

1.I took a few more steps in and found was I was looking for. The first was should be what. 2. My hearth was beating really fast and I tried ...

1. My brother Kyle tells me… You've already told the reader that he's your brother several times. Just say, Kyle tells me. and end with a single period, not ... ...

front of him stood a large door, one half of which was slightly ajar. For some reason, this doesn't flow well in my mind...I don't think the one half bit ...

1. The Pizza Reef was downstairs in the food court of the mall, right in between Panda Express and The Great Potato. Which meant that our lines were always the ...

Spaces! Spaces are good! I promise. =p 1. "The basement is cold today, because it’s raining outside and there’s no heating system. The place is pretty much an icebox today" ...

Well, it seems that everyone else has gotten here before I did...=p So...I don't know if this is going to help or not, but I'm going to give it a ...

1. The thing many fear because they think it is the end of all life. Some want because they believe they will see loved ones that have already died. Others ...

Okay, I'm sorry, but I can't finish this! There are way too many characters in like three seconds! I didn't see any gramatical errors, but introduce charcters slowly! Like, for ...

First off, double space! It makes it easier to read! Lol. "Meghan snorted sarcastically, even though it was a very unladylike thing that she would never do in public." This ...